So that's it.
Release time:
2020-08-14
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Every market day, the township farmers' market is especially lively. Farmers will take their agricultural products to the market to trade in exchange for some daily necessities.
Peanuts in the fields next door to Lao Wang's house are growing well this year, and they are indeed fruitful after autumn. Early in the morning, Lao Wang happily picked up two large baskets of peanuts and went to the market step by step. I found a popular place to start selling. Before it opened, a group of urban management officers came to collect management fees. They asked for 50 yuan, or they would take away his electronic scale. Lao Wang was so anxious that he sat on the ground and cried loudly. His move blindfolded the urban management team members. According to common sense, how can a big master around 50 lose face for this mere 50 yuan in full view of the public? The careful chengguan captain sun felt strange about this, so he invited Lao Wang to the office to ask patiently. after a while, Lao Wang's tears came out as follows: Lao Wang was a poor family in the village, with a white-haired old mother suffering from severe cataracts and a daughter studying in junior high school. although his wife looked strong, she was deaf and mute. Lao Wang was disabled on her right foot for life because of a car accident the year before last, the inconvenience of movement is the pillar of the family, and these two baskets of peanuts are the living expenses of their family for several months.
After hearing Lao Wang's cry, Captain Sun said earnestly: "The management fee of 50 yuan is unavoidable according to the regulations. Everyone is equal in market competition. However, considering the special situation of your family, you can not pay it first. You can rest assured to go back to the market to sell peanuts!"
A few days later, Captain Sun took the team members to Lao Wang's family and handed over ,000 yuan donated by their team to Lao Wang. He told Lao Wang good news. Through their efforts, he had helped his family apply for a low-income family and paired up with the team to support her daughter to finish all her studies.
Lao Wang knelt on the ground with a "plop" and said with tears: "Thank you for the good leadership of the Communist Party and the warm care of the government ......" (Wang Meiqin)
Tutor Comments (Xu Shuifa, member of Zhejiang Writers Association, short story writer):
It can be seen that the author of this article has put some effort into writing this story. Generally speaking, the first writer wrote that the management fee for setting up a stall is over. The author of this article makes the story turn a corner, that is to say, digging deeper into the connotation, so that the shaping of the character image can be further improved. However, there is still a gap between this article and a successful short novel. First, the length is too short, and the number of words in short novels is about 1500 words. Second, the theme of the story is old-fashioned. Don't talk about short novels in similar works, even the usual news reports have seen it and lost its freshness. Third, from the technical level of the creation of small novels, the shaping of the characters is not full enough. The key is the lack of details. No matter Lao Wang or Captain Sun, try to explain the characters with narrative, let the details speak and use more verbs, so that the story will be concrete and vivid and the characters will be vivid.
There are still some minor problems that should be taken as a warning. For example, "one step at a time" usually uses "limp", "polish" should be "wipe", "original" should be "original", "support" should be "subsidy", and the use of "de", "de" and "de" should be paid more attention. It should be noted that no matter how good the idea is, if there are many mistakes, it will be difficult to attract the reader's attention. Another example is that the truth of art first comes from the truth of life. Generally, temporary stalls in farmers' markets charge about 5-10 yuan per day. Morning market 2 yuan and 5 yuan are the majority. As soon as the city management opens its mouth, 50 yuan makes readers feel untrustworthy. How much can two baskets of peanuts sell? These subtle things sometimes respond to the words "details determine success or failure.
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